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I'm just a stitch away,
From perfection.

I'm just a stitch away,
From realization.

I'm just a stitch away,
From completion.

Yet I'm out of thread,
Out of space,
Out of luck,
Out of time.

I gave up-
Set down my work.
I gave in-
Cut the ties.

I broke bonds-
Burned the holds.
I ran off-
Leaving ruined cloth.

But in truth,
There was more.


There was thread left to spare.

It was just a snag,
A knot in my perfection.

A meaningless reason
For me to give up.

So why did I insist on stopping?
Why did I insist on running?
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A Stitch Away by Thisntme

/ / / ©2013-2015 Thisntme
I'M BACK!!!! =D!

Ok yeah, seriously though- sorry for those that missed me posting new pieces =D!
EDIT: Changed like two lines to help it flow a bit better. Hope y'all like the better flow :meow:
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Eredev Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
How did I miss this one :confused:
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Any other one of my recent ones EXCEPT this one, I could pass off as missing it...

This one has been on my featured tile for since it was posted...
Blind fool :X!
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Eredev Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
And that's how I found it :D
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconquadruplefacepalmplz:
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Eredev Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
Can you kindly take those hands away? I can't see anything...
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconextremefacepalmplz: [Never :XD:!]
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Eredev Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
But... but... how can I read anything you write now?!
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The memories of reading them will be uploaded to your brain via visual processors, and integrated into your consciousness.

[Fine... *removes the hands*]
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Dauntless-Cookie Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist
wah another poem of yours to add to my favorites :meow: and i agree with wolfshadow i like the way you changed the font, amazing poem :D
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a bunch :D!!! Glad you liked it!!!!
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PinkTroll Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
Cool how you minimized your poem, and just a great poem.
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I figured since the focus of the poem was becoming more serious, I would force the reader to focus more as well :meow:

Thanks =D!
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WolfShadow567 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the way you changed the font
beautiful poem,metaphors,Ahh yes....
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :meow:!
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Ellipsis-0 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
This poem has a very interesting concept but there are just two things I wanted to point out.
First off, it seems very…rushed, which you might have even tried to accomplish especially towards the ending. However, the first three stanzas before she runs out of thread should take place before the panic starts, the easiest way to achieves this is to make the lines longer.
Secondly in the 5th stanza you used gave twice and broke twice in the 6th, which you might have done on purpose but with them beg read only about five words away it sounds kind of repetitive.
Still, this poem is quite charming and open for interpretation…my best guess is stitches represent lies and when she "runs out of thread" some one finds out breaking her façade in which she runs away from it all. I'm looking forward to more of your work and curious to what the literal meaning you had in mind is.

Gah~ That sounds very negative but think of it as a critique
In which I give you
Overall: ★★★★☆
Vision: ★★★★★
Originality:★★★★☆
Technique:★★★☆☆
Impact:★★★★★

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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:icondragonweep: Thank you for the critique [however backwards you had to do it =P]!

And yes, I will admit this poem was a bit rushed in general, not sure why though. [Ok that clapping icon is very creepy, but thanks =P]
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Ellipsis-0 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
No problem! ^~^

It's mostly in the shortness of the lines.
Such as:
"The butterfly was in flight,
As it flew next to my kite"
Sounds more rushed then
"The butterfly fluttered softly in flight,
As it met with my sky-high kite"
(That sounds stupid but you get my point, yes?)
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I get what you mean =P!
I'm just not that great with flowery language [I'm very blunt with my words usually :|. [link] was one of my earlier pieces, and I'd say it's a fair example of how blunt I can get :XD:!]
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Ellipsis-0 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Hmm... well my advice would be to familiarize yourself with a wide variety of adjective, adverbs, and descriptive verbs.

Here's some (very long) lists I found:
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But the best way to stumble upon great words to use is read, read, read, then read some more c:
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I think you missed what I was meaning there, but no matter =P!
I'm blunt in my poetry: I use a wide vocabulary, but I just don't see why I should describe something anymore than it already is. Pointing out innate facts about an object, through flowery language, when all I needed was the connection to the object/idea just seems so pointless to me.

Thus, my righteous spiraling downfall shall be a pale comparison in the face of the poetic majesties that inhabit this marvelous mass we appointed the name of "Earth." [That's a mouthful -.-]
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Ellipsis-0 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Oh sorry about that then ^~^;

That's actually not too bad XD
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Thisntme Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
=P No need to apologize for expressing a feeling =D!

Haha thanks :meow: didn't really thing while typing that out- that's why it sounded so good. [You can really tell if one of my poems are subconscious or forced]
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